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Task1 Application letter Write to the manager about your experience , qualitification, skills and others

#application #manager #qualitification #skills
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to ask if you could possibly inform me about equipment from your company. I work for
company
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a company
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 "Saneg" which
one
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 of the large oil and gas production companies. We are interested in your company's equipment called "Plungerlift" for producing oil from the well. We do not have enough information about "Plungerlift". What data do you require ?
That is
 why, I invite you to
meeting
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the meeting
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by
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 ZOOM. Thank you for your time reading
this
 letter and considering our request. If you would like to share more information, you can connect by Telegram or email me using the contact details
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. I hope you will reply at your earliest convenience. +99897 313 89 10 for Telegram [email protected]
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Javokhir Norboev
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task achievement
The letter should have a clear purpose in mind, such as applying for a job or addressing a complaint, based on your instructions. Your current letter seems to be more of an inquiry rather than an application for a job. Make sure to follow the task requirements closely.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical structure by introducing your experience, qualifications, and skills in separate and clearly defined sections to better align with the requirements of a job application letter.
suitable writing tone
You have used a formal and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for this type of correspondence.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are correctly formatted and professionally articulated.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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