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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The table and charts show the information on the
police
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 budget and how they were distributed in the years 2017 and 2018 respectively. In 2017, the most funding the
police
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 received was from the National Government of Britain which provided 175.5
million
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pounds
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 out of the total funding of 304.7
million
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pounds
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. The second most was from local taxes which were collected from the people of Britain
which
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 contributed to 91.2
million
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pounds
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 in funds meanwhile, other sources like grants only contributed 38
million
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. In 2018, there were no big differences in the allocations of funds by the National government and by local taxes as they contributed 177.8
million
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pounds
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 and 38.5
million
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pounds
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 respectively followed by Local taxes which showed a significant increase of 11.1
million
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pounds
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 The expenses of the
police
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 force
also
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has
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 not changed much during 2017 and 2018. The only major difference in the expenditure was
increase
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an increase
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 in spending
of
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on
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 technology during the year 2018 by 8 percentage points as compared to 2017. The spending of money on buildings and transport remained the same in
the
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both years at 17%
while
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 the money contributing to the salaries of
police
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 officers and staff was decreased by 6 percentage points.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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