IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

It is very expensive to restore old buildings,and it would be better to spend this money on new houses .To what extent do you agree ?

Today we
want
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won't
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talk
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to talk
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 about
refurbishmant
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refurbishment
refurbishments
 buildings, you know
resorte
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resort
 or
make
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making
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 a new
house
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 is very important for some reason, At
the
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first,
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when you make a new
house
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 many
of
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people or
worker
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 can work in that case,
on the other
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hand
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 you help to
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society
socitey
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society
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, noweday we
are face
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 with
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an increase
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increase crowded
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 especially in
capital
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 of towns,
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 many
of
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pepople
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people
 need to
house
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, if you dont make
new
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a new
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many
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one many
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 of them become homeless.
According to
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study
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a study
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aroud
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around
 85
percent
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per cent
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 of people live in
appartment
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apartment
apartments
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warness
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awareness
to
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in
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socitey
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society
.
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hand
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 new hose have a new technology for energy saving and they are modern architect, If you compare
new
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a new
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house
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 with
refurbishment
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a refurbishment
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house
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undrestant
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understand
 new
house
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 for
new
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a new
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 design,new technology
and
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etc is better. Best
regarsd
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regards
regard

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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and detailed examples. It would benefit from a clearer introduction and conclusion to frame the argument.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of the essay by organizing ideas into clear, distinct paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and provides supporting details.
task achievement
Use specific examples and data to support your points. This will help make your arguments more convincing and comprehensive.
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Proofread for grammatical errors, unclear sentences, and typos. This will help improve readability and overall clarity.
task achievement
The essay addresses the importance of building new houses and mentions several key points such as employment opportunities and the need for housing in crowded cities.
task achievement
The essay discusses relevant points about modern technology and architecture in new houses, which is a relevant consideration in the debate.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Architectural style
  • Craftsmanship
  • Sustainable
  • Minimize
  • Energy efficiency
  • Housing shortages
  • Affordable options
  • Stimulate local economies
  • Tourism
  • Restoration industries
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