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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates between 2005 and 2015 subscriptions of cell
phone
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phones
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 and landlines in Eritrea,
India
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, the UK and Uruguay.
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, Eritrea had the lowest numbers in both mobile and fixed
lines
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. It
also
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 was constant throughout the years. All four countries were constant in fixed phone
lines
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although
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India
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 and Uruguay had a steady rise
at the end
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 with
India
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 under mobile phones. In 2005, Uruguay played below 5 from 2005 to 2015 in both mobile and fixed
lines
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, though it had a slight increase which was still below 5 in 2015. It was constant till the end.
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, the United Kingdom as well, had a constant trend in both phone
lines
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. On the one hand,
in
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apply
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mobile,
it
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which
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 started with 160 in 2005, had a small right to about 163 in 2006. From 2007 to 2015 it remained constant.
On the other hand
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, in fixed
lines
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, in 2005, it began at around 58 and slowly went to around 54 in 2008. In 2009 it picked up to around 57 and had a small constant drop till 2015 and
finally
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 was at around 50.
India
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 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom began low and picked up slowly under mobile phones.
India
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 was number 3 with about 45
lines
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 in 2005 and shot up with the highest number of
lines
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 in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone lines
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparisons
  • features
  • noticeable
  • patterns
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • anomalies
  • highest
  • lowest
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