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The bar chart and table show information about the average daily use and the cost of domestic water in five countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bar chart and table show information about the average daily use and the cost of domestic water in five countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The bar graph depicts the average used
water
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 per day (unit in kiloliters per property) in six different cities in Australia, with the table showing the percentage of consumption of domestic
water
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 in seven aspects.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Perth have the most usage of
water
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, followed by Brisbane.
Moreover
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, the highest consumption of
water
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 is used for agriculture.
To begin
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 with, the highest
water
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 usage is in Perth around 300, which is twice as in Melbourne, followed by Brisbane, with 250,
then
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 in Adelaide for about 240.
Furthermore
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, the average
water
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 consumption in Sydney was 200, and the lowest is in Canberra with roughly 130.
In addition
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, 67% of
water
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 was used in agriculture, and 9% in households.
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, manufacturing and other industries have the same rates at 4%,
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water
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 supply and electricity and gas supply at 7%.
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, the lowest amount of
water
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 was used on mining with 2%ใ
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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