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DThe table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

DThe table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The table shows
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police
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the police
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 budget in 2017 and 2018 from different sources in
UK
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the UK
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. The pie chart illustrates to which categories given money was spent.
Overall
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,
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the
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total
police
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 budget was 304.7
million
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 and
then
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 increased to 318.6
million
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 in 2018.
In addition
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, the national government was
main
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the main
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 organization
what
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that
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 gave cash in both years. Regarding
to
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apply
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spending, more than half of the budget went to salaries in 2017 and 2018.
Firstly
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, in 2017 the national government used 175.5
million
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to
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for
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police
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 needs,
in contrast
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 in 2018 they gave 177.8
million
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.
According to
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local
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the local
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 taxes category,
police
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 administration took 91.2
million
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 in 2017 and
then
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 102.3
million
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 in 2018.
Secondly
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, 75% of
total
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the total
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 used money was salaries for workers but in the next
year
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year,
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this
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 number significantly
drop
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dropped
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 to 65 per cent total. To compare, technology type of spendings rose from 8 per cent to 14%
at the end
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. Building and transport
was
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were
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 without any
flactuation
Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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