THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFOMATION ABOOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A uk university between 2010 and 2012. Summerise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparision where relavent.

THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFOMATION ABOOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A uk university between 2010 and 2012. Summerise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparision where relavent.
The bar graph compares the total
amount
of home and international
learners
exploring computer science at the UK college over a 2-year
period
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the number of British
students
was
outstanding
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than the
amount
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of international
learners
throughout the
period
.
Moreover
, we can see that the number of men
students
living in the UK fluctuated over the
period
,
whereas
girls showed a steady increase,
also
, the sum of international
learners
increased throughout the years.
To begin
with, we note that in 2010 the total number of British
students
was around 40 before a significant decline to around 25,
while
international
students
were half as many at 20. From 2011 to 2012, the
amount
of both international and home
students
increased dramatically respectively from about 23 to below 40 and from under 25 to over 40 in the UK university. British female
students
have demonstrated that they are in a dominant position throughout the
period
, in 2010, the total
amount
of them was roughly 30, and it rose moderately to below just 45, before reaching a peak at 45 in 2012. Regarding the international women
students
, there
also
was a slight increase over the given time, from approximately 15
students
to only 20
learners
at the end
of
this
period
.
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