It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don’t want to do, or don't have time to do, for example household chores or looking after children. Is this a good way of providing work for others? Should people do these things for themselves?
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In
this
modern world that
all Correct word choice
where
people
suffer from their busy schedules , It is a common trend to delegate some non-specialized works
to third parties. From my perspective, it not only could provide job Fix the agreement mistake
work
opportunity
for some other Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
people
, but also
it could lead to work life
balance.
To launch into Add a hyphen
work-life
this
topic, offering some simple works
to other Fix the agreement mistake
work
people
could provide some employment opportunities and improve their economic situations
. To illustrate more, we can imagine some students, single parents and Fix the agreement mistake
situation
disadvantages
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disadvantaged
people
who need to supply
their requirements by working in simple positions Verb problem
meet
such
as taking care of children or household chores. Needless to mention, they not only could manage their lives, but also
their self-confidences
and financial Correct your spelling
self-confidence
independency
will be strengthened.
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independence
Furthermore
, delegating some usual tasks
to others can increase crowd’s
productivity. Correct article usage
the crowd’s
For instance
, when human
support each other in their duties, they can Fix the agreement mistake
humans
concentrated
more on their specialized or enjoyable missions and Change the verb form
be concentrated
concentrate
consequently
their quality of tasks
will be elevated. For example
, I asked a woman to take care of my 8 year old
daughter Add a hyphen
8-year-old
in
summer days, so my stress level decreased Change preposition
on
alot
and I could free up my mind and Correct your spelling
a lot
focused
on my job. Wrong verb form
focus
Therefore
, outsourcing the
mundane Correct article usage
apply
tasks
such
as household chores can improve the quality of life and allocated
specialized Wrong verb form
allocate
tasks
.
In a nutshell, it is logical to ask some others to assist us in our parental and household responsibilities. Since we provide some job opportunities to others and also
do our tasks
efficiently.Submitted by zohmoz93 on
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