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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. M

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. M
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The presented diagram gives data on how electric
power
 is produced in
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a hudroelectric
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hudroelectric
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hydroelectric
hydro-electric
power
 station.
Overall
,
it is clear that
this
 diagram contains certain which
startin
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start in
start
 from
river
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the river
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 coming to
high-level
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the high-level
a high-level
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reservoir
 and ending with
ending with
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apply
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pumping out and pumping in
water
. In accordance with
diagram
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the diagram
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 the process
is starting
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starts
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from
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with
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 filling
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
andholding
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and holding
this
water
by
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in
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dam
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the dam
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,
then
water
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the water
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flow
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flows
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 in the tube to generate electricity in day,
pass
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passes
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throw
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through
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 reversible turbines to operate
generator
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a generator
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, in
generator
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the generator
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 creates electricity in
power
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a power
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 station and
by
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through
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power
 lines electrity moves to national grid.
Moreover
,
in
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during
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day
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the day
a day
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,
water
 goes to
low-level
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the low-level
a low-level
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reservoir
.
Furthermore
, at night
water
 from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir
pass
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passes
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 throw reversible turbines that pump
water
 to
high-level
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a high-level
the high-level
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reservoir
.
Also
 at night intake that
open
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opens
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 in
day
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the day
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closed
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closes
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 at night and only enters
water
 but
do
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does
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 not give
water
 escape and
this
 process is
repeating
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repeated
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everyday
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every day
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 to create 
an
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apply
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 electricity.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, reservoir, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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