The diagrams below show how a district park looked ten years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show the layout of a district park in 2009 and the current year.
Overall
, some major changes took place after 2009, such
as the development of Cycling
path on the north Correct article usage
a Cycling
side
of the park, a new picnic and boating spots near the pond.
The major development can be seen on the western side
of the park where a soft play area
is introduced near the children's play area
and a cafe is built in the Green area
section.
Few
new sites are Correct article usage
A few
also
there on
the south Change preposition
in
area
, where two new sites, boating and picnic spots are developed nearby
the pond. The capacity of car parking is Correct your spelling
near
also
increased from 20 cars in 2009 to 50 cars in present
year. Few sites and areas Add an article
the present
in
the map remained untouched Change preposition
on
such
as the tennis courts, football ground and children's play area
in
the north Change preposition
on
side
of the map and green
Correct article usage
the green
area
and pond on the southern side
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