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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans illustrate
how
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what
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 the
porth
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Porth
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harbour
looks
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looked
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 like in 2000 and now.
Overall
,
this
harbour
 has added more facilities for tourists at present, in the aspect of
transports
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transport
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, accommodation and other areas. In 2000, there was just one dock for the passenger ferries. In the south-east of the
harbour
, there was a castle which was in a disused statue. At present, a new dock has been constructed on the west
side
 of the previous one, which
provide
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provides
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 more space for ferries. And the public beach is still
at
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on
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 the same
side
 as 2000. For the accommodation, the disused castle now has been turned into a hotel,
while
 a new road has been constructed to link the hotel with the
side
 road
whch
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which
lead
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leads
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 to the main road. On the west
side
 of the
harbour
, a new area for
tourisms
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tourism
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 is added next to a car park,
which
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and which
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 entrance has
beem
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been
 changed from south to west. In the
center
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centre
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 of the
haobour
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harbour
, the area for fishing boats and
that
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apply
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for
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apply
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marina
has
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have
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 switched their location with each other. Now, the fishing area is on the northern of the marina.
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You have made a good attempt at describing the changes in the harbour, but there are some inaccuracies and unclear parts. Focus on describing the changes more clearly and logically.
task achievement
Try to use a greater variety of vocabulary and sentence structures to express your ideas more clearly. This will help improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are well-organized. Use paragraphs to separate different parts of your description for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and attempts to provide a conclusion.
task achievement
You have successfully identified and described some main changes in the harbour.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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