The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicted the proportion of different categories of families living in
poverty
in Australia in 1999. The family types being investigated are
single aged
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persons, aged
couples
, single with no
children
,
couples
with no
children
, sole
parents
and
couples
with
children
. The proportion of people from each household type living in
poverty
is represented both in percentages and numbers in the table. Single aged
person
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persons
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and aged
couples
experienced the least
poverty
with the percentage of 6% and 4% respectively. Single persons with no
children
and sole
parents
have suffered the most in terms of
poverty
with a percentage of 19% and 21% respectively.
On the other hand
,
couples
with no
children
and
couples
with
children
are experiencing
similar
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percentage of
poverty
at around 10%.
By comparison
, aged
couples
and aged persons suffered the least in
poverty
while
single
parents
are the worst sufferers of
poverty
in the country. It suggested that the government may need to provide more financial support to single
parents
while
aged people are more financially independent.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, couples, children, parents with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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