The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australlan cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant.

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The chart illustrates the proportion of habits of city residents for purchasing

coffee

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and drinks in five different Australian cities in

last

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the last

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four weeks.

Overall

, it can be seen that most of the

people

in all cities went to

cafe

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cafes

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to buy tea or

coffee

while

on the other hand

, little

people

went to buy fresh

coffee

in all five cities. Looking into detail,

people

sydney

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Sydney

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bought more than 60% of instant

coffee

whereas

more than 45%

people

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of people

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bought instant

coffee

Moreover

, the

people

of Sydney consumed 43

coffee

or tea.

In addition

, the point worth noting is that the same

habbit

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habit

happened in Melbourne. In all the five countries less than 45%

people

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of people

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bought fresh

coffee

in the

last

4 weeks.

Moreover

, most noticeably of all it can be seen that, in

Adelaide

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Adelaide,

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people

tend to

bought

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buy

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instant

coffee

instead

of fresh

coffee

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4 paragraphs

145 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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