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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have received a letter from your bank, asking you to acknowledge receipt of a new bank card. However, the card was missing from the envelope. Write a letter to the bank's head office. In your letter: explain why you are writing express concern about the missing card ask them what they intend to do Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear __________

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inquire about my missing debit
card
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 from the envelope which I received recently as a paper mail. As my previous
card
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 was expiring so I applied for the new one but
due to
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 some
reasons
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 the bank employee was unauthorized to issue the hard copy of the
card
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 right away. So, she apply for the new
card
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 which I
suppose
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was supposed
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 to receive in
following
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the following
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 business day. When I
get
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got
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 the envelope, there were two
acknowledgements
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acknowledgement
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 receipts but there
were
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was
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 no
offical
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official
card
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 as It has been already activated so I am concerned that my personal information is at risk. It would be greatly appreciated if my
card
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will
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would
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 be blocked at your earliest convenience and
send
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sent
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 the another
card
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 as I do not have any
card
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 at the moment so It is much needed. I will be thankful if
this
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 matter is taken into account. Yours sincerely, Ravinder Kaur.

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complete response
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement in sentences. For example, 'she apply for the new card' should be 'she applied for the new card.'
logical structure
Enhance coherence by streamlining some sentences and avoiding redundancy. For example, 'When I get the envelope, there were two acknowledgements receipts but there were no offical card as It has been already activated so I am concerned that my personal information is at risk.' could be more concise.
complete response
The letter clearly explains the purpose of writing and concerns about the missing card.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for the situation.
greeting and closing
The letter ends with a courteous closing.
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