The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
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above is the bar chart depicting the total quantity of
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of the United Kingdom telephone calls between 1995 and 2002. The call types being studied were local fixed calls, national and international fixed
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lines
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and
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calls.
Also
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,"Billions" was used as the units of
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being measured.
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the chart, the figures indicated that mobile calls
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shown a significant upward trend over the 17 years.
Likewise
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, figures of National and international fixed calls
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also
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shown a steady growth in terms of
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over the years.
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, the
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of local fixed line calls
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been showing a declining trend since 1999 from 90
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billion
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to around 70
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only
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the end of the study. To summarize, it was particularly interesting to note that mobile calls
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been replacing traditional
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within a short period of time despite international calls
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important among the United Kingdom citizens.
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, the
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figures
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mobile calls suggested that
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landlines
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might be completely replaced by mobile calls in the future.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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