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Your next-door neighbor likes to listen to music late at night. Because of the loud music, you often lose sleep. Write a letter to the building manager. In your letter describe the situation explain the problems it is causing you offer at least one solution

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Dear Mrs Ram, I am writing
this
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regards
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 to the inconvenience that I am facing on
daily
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a daily
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 basis
by
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 the
next door
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neighbor
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. Since the new tenant had moved into the building. I am facing a lot of problems in order to get a good sleep at night because he is a
music
 addict and often
listens
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 loud
music
 at night.
Moreover
, he invites his friends and relatives to his place and
do
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 parties till morning. I study and work at the same time and often have school exams on a weekly basis.
Thus
, I always prefer to study at night because of my work schedule. But
from
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 the
last
 few days,I
was
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 not able to fully concentrate on my studies because of
such
high
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loud
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 noises from their house.
As they
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They
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 play songs until 2 in the morning
and
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which hinders my sleep. One of the
possibility
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 is if you could send him a written warning notice that says no loud
music
 after 10.
Then
 it might help me to sleep and focus on my studies well as I already told him multiple times to lower the sound if
they
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he want to
listen
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music
 but he always ignored
and
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me and
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 often argued. Looking forward
for
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 your response Best regards, Saniya
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general
Proofread your letter to catch and correct small grammatical errors, such as missing articles or punctuation issues.
task achievement
Try to be even more specific about how the loud music impacts your daily life, possibly giving exact examples of how you were distracted or missed an opportunity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity. Consider splitting the problems paragraph into two: one for your sleep issues and another for how it affects your studies.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite yet firm, which is appropriate for this context.
logical structure
The structure of the letter is logical, starting with an introduction, followed by the problems caused, and concluding with a suggested solution.
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