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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter • explain your situation • describe your problems • tell him/her when you think you can start. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address.

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Dear Collins, I have to kindly apologize
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 because I am not able to start the next week at
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work. I was so
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 and prepared. Unfortunately, my younger daughter had
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 next two weeks. My husband is on his business trip
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 to start on
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 of September. I know
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 different situation, but my daughter needs me. Hopefully, you will accept my request. Thank you very much for your understanding Kind regards Andrea Kroupa
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task achievement
Your letter achieves the task well, but make sure to provide details in a clear structure: explain the situation more explicitly (such as mentioning when you were supposed to start), and consider expressing gratitude for the employer's understanding in the final paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Your letter generally flows well, but consider organizing it more clearly. Try to keep each paragraph to a single main idea. For instance, separate the explanation of your daughter’s surgery from the logistics of your husband's business trip.
communication skills
Your greeting and closing are both appropriate and polite, helping to establish a professional tone in your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • apologies
  • commencement date
  • postpone
  • urgent matters
  • documentation
  • commitment
  • flexibility
  • adjustments
  • reassurance
  • eager to contribute
  • rectify the situation
  • feasible start date
  • collaboration
  • understanding
  • mitigate
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