The table shows the number of employees and factory producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901

The table shows the number of employees and factory producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901
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The table
give
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gives
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information about the amount of
workers
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and
silk
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industrials in the UK and Wales every ten years from 1851 to 1901.
It is clear that
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the
number
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of both male and female
workers
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experienced
the
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a
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downward trend.
While
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the
silk
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industries
considerable increase
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. In 1851, the
number
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of male
workers
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was around 53.964.
while
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,
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the
number
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of female
workers
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was around 76.786 higher than
men
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male
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workers
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approximately by 20 and
net
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the net
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of both
workers
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around
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was around
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130.750. After that, the figure of male and female
workers
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gradually increased until 1891. The
number
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of male
workers
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slightly increased but back to go down in 1901.
While
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the figure
of
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for
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women
workers
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and the amount of both genders
shown
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a downward trend throughout the period.
In contrast
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, the figure
of
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for
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silk
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the silk
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industrial dramatically increased approximately by 500 in the first decade before
fluctuated
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between 1861 and 1881 around 761, 693, and 702 respectively.
Moreover
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, in the
last
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twenty
years
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years,
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the
number
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of
silk
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factory
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factories
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experienced
decline
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a decline
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to 623
at the end
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of
period
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the period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, silk, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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