The table shows the number of employees and factory producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901
The table
give
information about the amount of Change the verb form
gives
workers
and silk
industrials in the UK and Wales every ten years from 1851 to 1901.
It is clear that
the number
of both male and female workers
experienced the
downward trend. Correct article usage
a
While
the silk
industries considerable increase
.
In 1851, the Replace the word
considerably increased
number
of male workers
was around 53.964. while
,
the Remove the comma
apply
number
of female workers
was around 76.786 higher than men
Correct your spelling
male
workers
approximately by 20 and net
of both Correct article usage
the net
workers
around
130.750. After that, the figure of male and female Add a missing verb
was around
workers
gradually increased until 1891. The number
of male workers
slightly increased but back to go down in 1901. While
the figure of
women Change preposition
for
workers
and the amount of both genders shown
a downward trend throughout the period.
Wrong verb form
showed
In contrast
, the figure of
Change preposition
for
silk
industrial dramatically increased approximately by 500 in the first decade before Correct article usage
the silk
fluctuated
between 1861 and 1881 around 761, 693, and 702 respectively. Wrong verb form
fluctuating
Moreover
, in the last
twenty years
the Add a comma
years,
number
of silk
factory
experienced Fix the agreement mistake
factories
decline
to 623 Add an article
a decline
at the end
of period
.Add an article
the period
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