Some people think that reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing games for children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, many parents and other people believe that reading
books
such
as stories is more effective for young minors than being engaged with programs on TV or games.In my opinion, I completely agree that children must spend more time reading
books
.I will discuss my views in the following paragraphs,concluding with a suitable summary.
Firstly
, reading
books
will improve and develop their reading skills and
also
speaking skills.As we know
that
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reading and speaking are
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of
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essential competencies in every child's life
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when they are in school and
then
going to a high level which is University.
For instance
,
although
reading and oral communication are taught in schools,many
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them are still until now not interested in reading and they have a
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of communication with others especially outside of school, as they feel is
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habit to do.
Therefore
,when reading begins as a habit at an early age, young kids will clearly improve their speed in reading and good skill oration.
Secondly
, stories cultivate creativity and
imagination
. children who read narratives will encounter many different characters and events giving them the opportunity to be in another world full of their own
imagination
.
For example
, many scientists say that youngsters who spend more time
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books
become emotionally intelligent and recognize and understand their own feelings and the feelings of others.
Therefore
, the freedom of
imagination
can not be obtained through TV shows or
while
playing games.
To sum up
, I strongly my position that reading has a number of advantages for the young generation for improving in every expect of their life
such
as in reading and speaking.
Also
developing their personality in creativity and
imagination
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • imagination stimulation
  • linguistic skills
  • audiovisual stimuli
  • interactive learning
  • digital literacy
  • solitary engagement
  • narrative comprehension
  • educational content
  • screen time
  • attention span
  • multimedia experiences
  • well-rounded development
  • motor skills
  • traditional versus modern
  • balanced approach
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