The following pie charts show the places where adults aged 20+ and children in the age group 2 to 19 ate in the year 2005 in the US. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the

population

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of ages in

Yemen

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and Italy in 2000 and anticipation for 2050.

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, what stands out from the charts is that with the exception of

year

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the year

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2000 in

Yemen

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, the proportion of

people

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between 15 and 59 in all charts

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constitutes the highest proportion. In 2000,

people

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aged 15 to 59 comprised almost 46% of the

population

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Yemen

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while

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it is expected that

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figure will witness a rise in 2050 and will reach

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57.3%.

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, in

Yemen

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0-14-year-olds and individuals aged 60 and over accounted for around half of the total and 3.6%, respectively. It is projected that by 2050 the prospective figures for

people

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between 0 and 14, and, 65 and over will have reached

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37% and almost 6%. Italy’s 15-

59-year-old

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59-year-olds

were responsible for 61.6% of their

population

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in 2000,

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this

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figure will undergo a decline and will be 46.2% in 2050. the elderly

people

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in Italy formed about one-fourth of individuals in the year 2000. Over the next 50 years,

this

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figure will rise to 42.3%. 0-14-year-olds formed about 15% in 2000,

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the anticipation indicates that

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population

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will see a slight fall and

decreased

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to 11.5% in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, yemen, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

204 words

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The following pie charts show the places where adults aged 20+ and children in the age group 2 to 19 ate in the year 2005 in the US. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write a letter to a company asking for a refund for something you bought from them online. Write a letter to the customer service department. In your letter:  Describe the item you bought  Outline what the problem is  Explain why you want a refund

It is much easier to learn in a small class than in a larger one. To what extent that do you agree or disagree?

The rise of social media platforms has made easier for people to vent their frustration and complaints publicly. What are advantages and disadvantages of such a trend?

100.In many countries, the traditional family structure is changing, and an increasing number of children are being raised by single parents or by grandparents. Discuss the possible reasons for this trends and its potential consequences in society.