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What book or film do you think portrays a country’s culture the best? Would you recommend it to a foreign friend who wishes to learn and understand that country? Describe the book or film and explain why you would recommend it. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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There has been always a connection between art and
culture
. Books and films can be used as
best
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the best
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 options to emphasize a nation's
culture
. In my
essay
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 I will discuss a book that represents
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the tradions
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tradions
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traditions
 of my country and
reasons
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the reasons
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 behind
for
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recommeding
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recommending
 it. There are many printed work which describes
best
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the heritage of
Sri
 Lanka and of all the books I’ve read on
Sri
 Lankan
history
,
this
 is the
one
 that I found best in terms of a sweeping overview of a blend of
history
, politics and
culture
, from many different angles and authors as opposed to having, say, a textbook by
one
 author. There is a rather good textbook on the
history
 of
Sri
 Lanka by Professor K.M. de Silva. That’s the
one
 most people go to, especially if they’re not specialist historians. I would definitely recommend
this
 novel to a foreign friend who wishes to learn and understand Ceylon
culture
. The novel provides a deep insight into the
history
, traditions, and values of
lanka
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. It
also
 portrays the complexities of
Sri
 Lankan society, including the caste system and the struggles of social change.
Moreover
, the novel is
also
 renowned for its lyrical prose and poetic language, which is a hallmark of
ceylon
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Ceylon
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 literature. In conclusion, there are many books that represent
beauty
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the beauty
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,
culture
 and nature of
Sri
 Lanks not only from local authors but
also
 from foreign publishers. A
one
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book can give a person a vast amount
knowledge
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of knowledge
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 so reading
this
 book is
a
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 best way for an individual who
interested
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is interested
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 in local
culture
 and its values.
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Try to clarify and elaborate more on the title and author of the book. It will help provide context to the reader and strengthen your task response.
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In the second and third paragraphs, be more specific with examples from the book to support your points. Specific scenes or excerpts can make your arguments stronger.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use transitional phrases and make sure each paragraph relates logically to the one before and after.
coherence cohesion
Consider restructuring the essay so that the introduction provides a clear thesis statement, and each body paragraph focuses on one main idea related to that thesis.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps provide structure.
task achievement
You do a good job of addressing the prompt and providing your recommendation clearly.
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The language used is expressive and shows a good command of vocabulary and syntax, particularly in the concluding paragraph.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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