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Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Image: ielts-writing-bar-chart-uk-telephone-calls

Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Image: ielts-writing-bar-chart-uk-telephone-calls
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The bar chart illustrates telephone call
minutes
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 made by people in the United Kingdom using local-fixed
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line
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lines
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, national and international-fixed
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line
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 and
mobiles
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 throughout the period from 1995 to 2002. The call
minutes
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 are measured in billions.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that the usage of local-fixed
line
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 type of calls was the highest among other types,
although
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 experiencing a sharp decline over time. The call
minutes
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 of national and
international-fixed
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international fixed
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line
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lines
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 and
mobiles
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 witnessed an upward trend
comparing
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 to the usage of
local-fixed
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local fixed
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 lines experiencing a steady decrease
at the end
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 of the period.
To begin
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, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 that
population
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the population
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 talked over
local-fixed
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 lines was 70 billion
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, gradually increasing over the period and reaching a peak in 1999
to
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 90 billion
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. After 1999, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 plummeted to approximately 70 billion
minutes
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 until the end of 2002. On the other, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 calling from national and
international-fixed
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international fixed
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line
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lines
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 and
mobiles
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 saw an exponential increase over time. People started
from
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talking
around
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at around
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 40% gradually reaching
to
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over
the
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half in 5 years, and hitting 60% in 2002. The
number
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 of
minutes
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 over
mobiles
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 started from the lowest point and steadily
increasing
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increased
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 to one quarter in 2000, and
reaching to
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reached
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 nearly 50% in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, mobiles, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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