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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of British citizens participating in the
charity
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 by various age groups between 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, throughout the period middle-aged people around 36-50 contributed the most to
charity
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.
However
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, the lowest contributions were made by young adults from 18-25. In detail, in 1990, around 17% of the young people population had a part in British
charity
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.
In contrast
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, by 2010 the number of shares witnessed a sharp decline to just above 5%.
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, contributors in their late 20s to mid-30s had the second lowest shares in 1990, by the end of the period it saw a slight decrease to just under 25
percent
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per cent
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.
Nevertheless
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, Brits who are around the ages of 36-50 percentages show a significant fall to exactly 35%.about 33% of British seniors donated to
charity
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 in 1990, by the end of the period the number declined to exactly 35
percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words charity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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