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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care their children in the evening in 2022. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph indicates that an average of
parents
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 spend time taking
care
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 of their children separated by four different activities dressing, doing
homework
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, playing games and preparing for bed.
Overall
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, it is clear to see that dressing has the highest percentage of
mothers
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 spending time taking
care
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.
As well as
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, playing games that numerous of both
parents
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 do together.
However
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,
homework
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 is taken
care
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 of by my father more than others.
To begin
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 with, the biggest number of
mothers
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 taking
care
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 is dressing with close to 80% and just only 21% of bother
parents
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 are focused on it. Meanwhile,
homework
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 and preparing for bed are the second percentage of mother duties about 41-50%
however
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, the number of both
parents
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 preparing for bed is quite more than 50%.
Moreover
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, both fathers and
mothers
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 spent time playing games with their children about 70% and in the opposite way, just 25% of
mothers
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 did it. Alternatively, the percentage that fathers do is lower than others.
For instance
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, around 5% of father take
care
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 of
homework
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 and preparing their child.
Furthermore
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, only 3% are concerned about dressing. Anywise, the number of fathers who take
care
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 of
homework
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 is rather than three activities with 10%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, care, homework, mothers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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