The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to s3x and age.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The graphs demonstrate the
music
albums genre bought in Britain based on gender and age group.
Overall
, it is notable that the proportion of male buyers exceeds that of females. Ages between 16 to 24 and 25 to 34 are the major per cent in both types of
music
. In Pop
Music
, the majority of purchasers are 25 to 35 years old which accounts for about 32%, next to it are 16 to 24 years of age.
Additionally
, the difference between male and female buyers is nearly 10% with men being the dominant. Rock, looks similar to Pop
music
. The
men
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men's
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ratio is more than women and most purchasers are in
mid-twenties
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their mid-twenties
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to mid-thirties and
second
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second,
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to it are sixteen to twenty-four years of age.
However
, Rock
Music
has a higher demand than the other kind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph representation
  • categorized
  • predominant
  • disparities
  • similarities
  • age-related preferences
  • noticeable trends
  • age brackets
  • wider appeal
  • demographics
  • speculate
  • resurgence
  • vinyl records
  • digital streaming
  • music genres
  • albums purchases
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