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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied bar chart indicates how much
money
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people
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 earn in various wage groups in towns and the
center
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centre
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 areas of
Australia
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. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest average income yearly is Middle in cities.
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,
people
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 do not make
money
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 in low wages yearly in
Australia
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,which is the lowest amount of
money
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 earned over the period. Precisely %35 of
people
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 are in the middle
group
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 (between $70,000 and $120,000) in the cities in
Australia
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,compared to
people
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 who are in regional centres at nearly %26 in
this
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 country.
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,the number of populations who live in regional centres
are
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 in the lower middle
group
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 (from $40,000 to $70,000) at approximately a third (%33),just ahead of
people
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 in cities in the same
group
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 at exactly %30 in
Australia
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.
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,roughly %13 of
people
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 make
money
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 about $40,000 or less which is the
low
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lowest
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group
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 in the towns of
Australia
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.
Similarly
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,the proportion of
population
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the population
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 with high
salary
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salaries
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 in urban areas is a bit as much as the number of
people
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 in regional centres at %20 and %15,respectively.
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