The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.

The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.
Overall
, it is noticeable that the British
museum
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displayed the highest
number
of visitors at just above 700,000 in August.
Conversely
, the lowest
people
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who visited museums
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contributed to
national
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the national
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museum
in July and December.
To begin
with, the
number
of British museums stood at
slighly
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slightly
above 400,000 in the beginning month, before rocketing to reach a peak of roughly 700,000 in August.
Following
this
, it continued to slump at approximately 470,000 in the
last
period.
Similarly
, the history museums began at around 410,000 and
then
hit a high of 600,000 in August.
Next,
the figure plummeted to about 280,000 in December. Turning to the remaining categories, the
number
of people visiting
Science
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the Science
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museum
started at roughly 420,000, before peaking at 500,000 in September. After that, it experienced a dramatic decline to 300,000. Despite
this
, the
number
of visitors to the national
museum
exhibited
comparable
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amount across the entire period.
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