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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.

The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.
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Overall
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, it is noticeable that the British
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museum
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 displayed the highest
number
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 of visitors at just above 700,000 in August.
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, the lowest
people
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number of people
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 who visited museums
are
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contributed to
national
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the national
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museum
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 in July and December.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of British museums stood at
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slightly
 above 400,000 in the beginning month, before rocketing to reach a peak of roughly 700,000 in August.
Following
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this
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, it continued to slump at approximately 470,000 in the
last
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 period.
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, the history museums began at around 410,000 and
then
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 hit a high of 600,000 in August.
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the figure plummeted to about 280,000 in December. Turning to the remaining categories, the
number
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 of people visiting
Science
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the Science
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museum
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 started at roughly 420,000, before peaking at 500,000 in September. After that, it experienced a dramatic decline to 300,000. Despite
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, the
number
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 of visitors to the national
museum
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 exhibited
comparable
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a comparable
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 amount across the entire period.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 68%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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