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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those relate to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
I
work
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 as a
houman
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house
resouse
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resource
 manager and
i
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I
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 do all my
work
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 at home.
Few
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A few
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 months ago
i
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I
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 needed to buy
extra
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an extra
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 hard driver
for
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to
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 arrange my all
work
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files
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. I bought
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a sony
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sony
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Sony
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 1000GB hard driver from your store
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on o'connell
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o'connell
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O'Connell
 street in
may
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. I was really happy to use
this
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hd
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untill
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until
yesterday
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.
Yesterday
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 morning
i
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I
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 started to use
work
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files
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 from
hd
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 but was reading so long and
atleast
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at least
 it
stucked
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stuck
i
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I
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 tried
turn
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to turn
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on
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it on
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 and off
computer
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the computer
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 but still
same
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the same
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 and couldn't open the file.
Body paragraph 1
I
was
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had
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 have
many works
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lot of work
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should
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that should
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finish
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be finished
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 by
yesterday
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 all of my meeting
appointments
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appointment
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files
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was
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were
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 in that
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hd
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HD
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 but all
cancelled
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were cancelled
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 because
i
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I
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 couldn't see the
time
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times
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 and places.
Yesterday
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 afternoon
i
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I
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 called
to
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apply
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your customer service but they explained that
i
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 have to wait three working days.
Body paragraph 2
I have many urgent
metters
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matters
 in
this
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hd
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 so
i
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I
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 couldn't
not
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apply
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wait to fix that
so
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for so
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 long.
This
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hd have
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HD
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 still
a
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has a
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guarantee. I have
requeste
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requested
 to fix
this
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hd
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 and recover all my
files
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 by today!
Conclusion
I
belive
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believe
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 you are
good
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a good
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 well
known
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well-known
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 company so
i
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I
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 am waiting for your best and user friendly service as soon as possible.

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grammar
Check your spelling and grammar carefully. For example, 'houman resouse' should be 'human resource,' and 'atleast' should be 'at least.'
structure
Try to structure your essay more clearly with a strong introduction and conclusion. The current essay lacks a clear conclusion, and the introduction could be more engaging.
coherence
Improve the coherence by linking your ideas with appropriate conjunctions or transitional phrases. For example, use words like 'therefore,' 'however,' or 'furthermore' to connect your sentences and paragraphs.
content
Your essay does an effective job discussing the problem and its impact on your work, which makes it clear why you are requesting urgent assistance.
examples
The examples you provided, such as missing meeting appointments and the effect on your work, make the essay relatable and impactful.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • study
  • subject
  • choice
  • free
  • like
  • future
  • useful
  • science
  • tech
  • job
  • work
  • pay
  • grow
  • life
  • skill
  • think
  • read
  • write
  • talk
  • plan
  • core
  • mix
  • balance
  • advice
  • opportunity
  • interest
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