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The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 2003 to 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 2003 to 2018 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the crime levels in four nations:
USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Australia,and South Africa.The data is collected over the course of 35 years starting from 1985 till 2020.
Overall
, the graph shows a significant decrease in Serious assaults
whereas
 both
sexsual
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sexual
violance
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violence
 and robbery levels increased , and city
homcide
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homicide
 levels stayed stable throughout the period. In 2003, serious assaults
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extermely
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extremely
 common with a
rate
 of approximately 230 ,and later in 2004
it
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peaked
to
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 a
rate
 just below 250. for the rest of the period
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the
rate
 continued to decline
steadly
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steadily
 with a minor dip in 2013.
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Conversely
, robbery ,which was not present until 2010, had a
rate
 of only 100 in 2010 but rose it rose in 2014 to around 120 and
then
 was approximately equal to the serious assaults
rate
 in the following years.
Sexsual violance
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Sexual violence
 had a minimum
rate
 of about 30 in 2003 but it increased modestly till became 50 in 2018.City Homicide's
rate
 remained unchanged, but
this
 crime disappeared entirely in 2016 .
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