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The Maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Maps below show a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Maps demonstrate the changes to the Australian beachfront area between 1950 and the present.
Overall
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, some
facilitise remaind
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facilities remain
 unchanged
such
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 as the
westren
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western
 pool, the pavilion,and the dining tables.
In
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contrast
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 the car park,
light house
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lighthouse
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,and the
southren
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southern
 pool were all enlarged.
Likewise
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, It can be observed that new additions were added as well. In 1950, the main street ended at the parking lot , but now the street reaches all the way to the enlarged
light house
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lighthouse
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.
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,the
play ground
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playground
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 near the
dinnig
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dining
dinning
 tables was turned into an additional car park and the original park ,on the opposite side, was
expaned
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expanded
. Around the beach, two new surf clubs one to the west and the other to the south of the beach were constructed .
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, a new
resaurant
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restaurant
 behind the
southren surf club
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Southren Surf Club
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 was built .
furthermore
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, the
25 meters
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25-meter
 pool to the south of the beachfront was doubled in size. moving on,The pavilion and the adjacent
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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dinning
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dining
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 tables remained the same
while
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 the
light house
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lighthouse
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 was made higher.
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