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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
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The graphs demonstrate two key features: the
number
 of
visitsors
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visitors
 and
travelars
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travellers
 in the
UK
 , and the most popular visited
nattions
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nations
 by
UK
citizins
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citizens
.
Overall
, it can be
obsereved
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observed
 that over the years the
number
 of
visitors
 to the
UK
 was slightly higher than the
number
 of
UK
 residents who
traveled
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travelled
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 abroad;
however
, both
numbers
 saw an increasing trend.
Additionally
,
france
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France
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 was the most
visitied
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visited
 country followed by
spain
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Spain
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. In 1979 the
number
 of incoming and outgoing people was relatively close with a minor difference of about 2
million
travelars
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travellers
 but the
numbers
 continued to increase at different rates ;
subsequentally
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subsequently
, by 1984 , the difference -in the rate- grew larger ,and the overseas
travelars
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travellers
numbers
 continued to rise
dramtically
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dramatically
while
numbers
 of
visitors
 increased modestly.
In
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At
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 the end of the period,visits abroad reached over 50
million
 ; visits to the
Uk
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UK
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,
however
, were just below 30
million
. The most visited nation by
UK
citizins
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citizens
 is France with about 12
million
visitors
 in 1999 .
secondly
 came Spain which had over 9
million
visitors
.
Then
 both the USA and Greece had about 3
million
oncomers
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consumers
incomers
 from the
UK
 . Turkey came in
last
 with about 2
million
vistors
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visitors
.
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