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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of British people lending donations categorized by
age
 groups in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of people in both years gradually increases up to a
perticular
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particular
age
 group and decreases after.
Moreoever
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Moreover
, there
are
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were
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 more
donators
 in 1990 compared to
year
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the year
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 2010, with few exceptions. The number of
donators
 in both years showed similar patterns, they
rise
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rose
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 and
drop
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dropped
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 after reaching a peak. In 1990,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of charity money lenders
increase
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increased
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 gradually until the
age
 group of 36 to 50
reaching
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reached
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 slightly over 40%, and
then
falls
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fell
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 immediately.
However
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However,
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 in 2010, the maximum point lies in the
age
 group of 51 to 65 with just below 40%. The percentage of people lending donations in 1990 is higher than
2010
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in 2010
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. From
age
 18 to 50, there
are
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were
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 more
donators
 in 1990 than
2010
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in 2010
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.
However
, from
age
 51 and beyond, the fraction of
donators
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donors
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 in 1990 is less than
2010
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in 2010
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, donators with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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