The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows the percentage of British people lending donations categorized by

age

groups in 1990 and 2010.

Overall

, the percentage of people in both years gradually increases up to a

perticular

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particular

age

group and decreases after.

Moreoever

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Moreover

, there

are

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were

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donators

in 1990 compared to

year

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the year

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2010, with few exceptions. The number of

donators

in both years showed similar patterns, they

rise

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rose

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and

drop

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dropped

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after reaching a peak. In 1990,

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the numbers

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numbers

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number

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of charity money lenders

increase

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increased

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gradually until the

age

group of 36 to 50

reaching

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reached

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slightly over 40%, and

then

falls

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fell

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immediately.

However

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in 2010, the maximum point lies in the

age

group of 51 to 65 with just below 40%. The percentage of people lending donations in 1990 is higher than

2010

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in 2010

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. From

age

18 to 50, there

are

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were

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donators

in 1990 than

2010

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in 2010

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However

, from

age

51 and beyond, the fraction of

donators

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donors

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in 1990 is less than

2010

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in 2010

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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Clear and correct grammar

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