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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts depict the generation of
electricity
 from all sources and
renewables
 in Germany and France in the year 2009.
Overall
, Germany generates more than half the percentage of its
electricity
 from conventional thermal resources,
whereas
 France uses nuclear resources to generate most of its
electricity
. In the year 2009,
the
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conventional thermal resources contributed the most to
electricity
 production (59.6%),
whereas
 nuclear and
renewables
 produced 23% and 17.4% of
electricity
, respectively.
In addition
, the
renewables
 contain a large amount of biomass (39.3%) and wind (38.9%). In France, the major resource in the generation of
electricity
 is nuclear (76%),
however
, conventional thermal and
renewables
 contribute 10.3% and 13.7%, respectively.
Furthermore
, about 80.5% of the
renewables
 come from hydroelectric and others from wind (20.5%) and biomass (8.1%).
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