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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate
units
 of electricity
production
 which were used by five types of fuel
power
 in Australia and
France
 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, in 1980, many people in Australia used coal for their electricity products
while
 in
France
 three types of fuels were demanded.
Also
, in 2000, most Australian people used coal in comparison with French people who used Nuclear
power
 for their
production
.
It is clear that
 in 1980, the total
production
 in Australia was 100
units
 and 50 of coal was used as
power
 supply.
Besides
, both Natural Gas and Hydro
Power
 were 20. In 2000, the majority of the fuel source was coal with 130. Of course, two items were the lowest value with 2
such
 as Oil and Natural Gas
although
 the total
production
 was 170
units
. In
France
, both Coal and Natural Gas were 25 and the highest second item was Oil with 20 in 1980. In 2000, Nuclear
Power
 was the most used item with 126. The total
production
 in
France
 became doubled in 2000 with 180
units
.
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