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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your house/flat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter : 1. Explain the reason for the noise 2. Apologise 3. Describe what action you will take Start with Dear, Mr. Zaveri and Mr. Dalal

#neighbours #noise #house #reason #apologise #action #mr #zaveri #dalal
Good afternoon, dear Mr. Zaveri and Mr. Dalal. First of all, let me to express you my apologies. I'm writing
this
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 you the reasons
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 the noise from my flat.
Moreover
, I have written an announcement in the elevator, but somebody
teared
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 it down, so maybe you didn'
t
 have an opportunity to read it.
However
, it's not a reason to be rude, so I'll explain you
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all
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. My mom is living in another country, I haven'
t
 seen her for a long period. She
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got the tourist visa to Canada a few days ago, and we are planning her visit now. Don'
t
 worry, first and foremost I talked with our landlord about her visit,
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 aware. As you know, I'm living alone, so my flat isn'
t
 suitable for two people.
Therefore
 I have to buy some
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 furniture.
Furthermore
, I need to refurbish my flat slightly. It will take more
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or 3 days. I am planning to organise some lunch in the hall of the building after the finishing. Will be glad to see you all. Thanks in advance. Best regards, Anastassia.
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task achievement
The letter provides a clear explanation and apology for the noise, as well as the actions you will take to resolve the issue. To further enhance the task response, consider providing a bit more detail on how you plan to mitigate the noise during the refurbishment period.
coherence cohesion
The letter is generally well-organized and easy to follow. To improve the logical structure, consider breaking down the long paragraph into smaller sections to clearly separate the explanation, apology, and future actions.
greeting and closing
The letter starts with a polite greeting and ends with a courteous closing, which is very appropriate.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite, showing concern for the neighbors and taking responsibility for the noise.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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