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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart indicates comprehensive information regarding a gender-based comparison in selecting 8 majors in 2005. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is starkly apparent that Social
Science
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, Languages, and Art are the most sought-after fields by females,
while
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 other majors were appealing to boys.
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, the Social
Science
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 with the most participants was the girls' main area of
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interest
,
while
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 the
Science
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 was the most favorable for males. Upon more rigorous scrutiny it can be revealed that females selected
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Social
Science
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 the most
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an
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 it was followed by Languages
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.
The
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Art,
science
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, and
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literature
 took a similar portion at somewhere in the vicinity of 13 with Sciences a
liitle
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little
 bit less than the two others. The law and mathematics took the bottom of the list with just more and less than 5, respectively. As regards females, it can be seen that the Sciences was the most sought-after major with
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 23 followed by Mathematics and
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literature
, and Social
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. The Arts and Languages were the least l majors,
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 with ladies.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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