The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The chart illustrates the duration of the total number of telephone calls in billions of minutes which were divided into three categories, local-fixed
line
, national and
international - fixed
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line
and
mobiles
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calls, in the UK, between 1995 and 2002. In the local - fixed
line
, the
numbers
increased from 70
billion
in 1995 to 90
billion
in 1999, making it the highest phone call made.
However
, from 1999 to 2002 the
numbers
lowered steadily from 90
billion
and returned to 70
billion
just like in 1995. The national and international - fixed
line
started
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40
billion
in 1995, but soon the
numbers
gradually rose
up
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to approximately 60
billion
by the year 2002.
On the other hand
, the total duration from cell phones in 1995 was around 3 - 4
billion
, making mobiles
as
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the lowest
phone
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call made in the UK. By 2002, the
numbers
grew dramatically to around 42
billion
. In conclusion,
with
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the national and international - fixed
line
and calls from cell phones had the same upward trend between 1995 to 2002, but both of them were still lower compared to the local - fixed
line
which though the
numbers
decreased in 2002
it
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was still the highest.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, numbers, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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