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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The table presents the change in
amount
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the amount
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 of
people
how
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now
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 working as
a
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apply
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temporary migrant
empolyee
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employee
employees
 in four different countries (Australia, New Zealand,
United
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 Kingdom, United States) between the years 2003 and 2006.
Overall
, the number of temporary migrant
worker
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workers
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 increased throughout the time in the four countries.
Accourding
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According
 to the data, the largest increase in the quantity of temporary migrant
worker
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workers
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 where in The UK, it rose significantly from 137,000
persons
 in 2003 to 266,000
persons
 in 2006,
eventhough
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even though
 it is
equal
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the equal
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 rate of just 4.4
persons
 per 1000
people
 in 2006.
In contrast
, New Zealand was the smallest country in terms of
increase
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 in
amount
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the amount
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 of
people
how
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now
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 working as
a
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apply
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temporary migrant
empolyee
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employee
employees
; it grew slightly by 22,000
persons
 over the same period.
furthermore
, there was
considerable
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a considerable
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 rise in Australia from 152,000
persons
 in 2003 to 219,000
persons
 in 2006, at
rate
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a rate
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10.7
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persons
 per 1000
people
 in 2006.
Similarly
 in The US, there was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 growth in the number of temporary migrant
worker
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workers
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 by around 100,000
person
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people
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 throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, persons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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