The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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three maps depict the substitutes in the West

Park

Secondary School since its construction in 1950,

also

in 1980, and

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2010.

Overall

it is clear that

the most numbers of changes happened between 1950 and 1980.

However

, by 2010, there

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also

few but important differences. The houses that have taken place

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the west side of the map of 1950, were equally replaced by

car

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the car

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park

and science block.

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, farmland that was in the west-south corner has

became

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sports

field

. There was

also

little space left between

car

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park

, science block, and

sports

field

. After that, in another 30 years, all the ground that was taken by

sports

field

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in 1980

have been

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replaced by

car

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the car

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park

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parks

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in 2010 and almost half of the playground

were

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taken by

sports

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the sports

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field

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Nevertheless

, the main road

that is

on top of the map never changed. The same is about a school.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, sports, field with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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155 words

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