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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps displayed the changes
happened
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that happened
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 in the
village
 of Stokeford in
a
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the
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 period of time between 1930 to 2010.
overall
, the changes
shows
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show
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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of
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in
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 population because
,
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apply
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 there are
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
 of houses
were
Wrong verb form
being
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 built. Like on the west side of the
village
Add a comma
village,
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 the shops and Farmland were replaced by houses.
Also
, on the east
side
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side,
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 the Farmland were replaced and some houses
built
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were built
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 next to the Primary school.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the primary school located on the east side of the town was
expande
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expanded
 regarding of the increased population.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 there are some areas
are
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that are
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 the same
such
 as the Post office and The bridge was the same main road
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that connected
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connected
Wrong verb form
connects
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 all the several areas of the
village
.
However
, The Retirement home was built
instead
 of
Large
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a Large
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 house, In summary, the
village
 improved and transformed from a
village
 with small people
lived
Wrong verb form
living
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 there to a town have more people.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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