The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities.
Six
cities
are shown with data regarding
railway
systems built underground. As shown, there is a clear decline in
railway
length
proportional to the age of the
railway
, going from 394
km
to 126
km
when sorting the
cities
chronologically from oldest to newest,
conversely
, the next city, Kyoto shows a sharp decline from 126
km
to 11
km
, alongside the city of Los Angeles that proceeds it, showing a slight rise to 28
km
. We can see that the
passengers
per
year
tend to rise alongside the
length
of the
railway
, going from 50 to 775
passengers
per
year
,
although
the
cities
of Paris and Tokyo decline in
railway
length
while
still maintaining the rise of
passengers
per
year
, going from 775 to 1191 and 1927
passengers
per
year
. To summarize, railways tend to continue rising in
length
the newer they are,
although
a few newer
cities
have relatively short railways, and longer railways tend to experience more traffic per
year
in
passenger
Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
show examples
,
although
a few
cities
contradict
this
.
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