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The line graph and the bar chart give the information and forecast about the vehicle numbers and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and the bar chart give the information and forecast about the vehicle numbers and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line
graph
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 and bar
graph
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 present data
as well as
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 values comparing the percentage of vehicle numbers and the amount of CO2 emissions in
tonnes
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 in British and Wales(in millions) from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, what stands out from the
graph
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 is that vehicle numbers and CO2 emissions showed higher popularity over the given period. Looking at the details, it can be seen that, vehicles in England and Wales in 2000 were around 20 million. 10 years later, the average number went up slightly to 35 million and end of the year it showed a dramatic change of about a quarter. Examining the remaining bar
graph
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, cars emitted significant numbers of CO2 from 2000 to 2020,
finally
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, they reached around 3
tonnes
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 by 2020.
On the other hand
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, trucks grew like cars and the amount was significantly less from 0.6
tonnes
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 in 2000 to 1.3
tonnes
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 in 2020.
Finally
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, the amount of CO2 emissions from buses and vans
was
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were
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 likely to keep constant values of approximately 0.4 and 0.8
tonnes
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 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, co, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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