A friend from another coutry moving to your city for work. he asked you to advise about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter 1. suggest an interesting part of the city to live in. - beautiful river , italian restaurants , different culture 2. describe the public transport in your city. - 5 minute bus service , convenient, affordable pass , all day pass. 3. say how your friend can meet new people there. - Visit shops , bars and art gallery ,join tourist group destination.
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Dear Annie,
I hope you'
re
doing well . I'm
over the moon when I heard that you are moving to Vancouver Wrong verb form
I was
in
next month. Well! Before you move , I have some suggestions which would help you to live here .
Well! Change preposition
apply
There'
Correct your spelling
There are
re
a lots
of interesting places in Vancouver Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
city
and I'm really excited to see you around here. As I know , you'Capitalize word
City
re
foodie
like me so we've great Italian restaurants , Add an article
a foodie
ice
cream shops Correct word choice
and ice
as well
as
we both love South Indian food. Apart from food, we have great places to visit like Correct word choice
and
art
gallery, aquatic Add an article
an art
center
and beautiful lakes.
You Change the spelling
centre
also
do not need to worry about public transport at all in this
city because everything is nearby like grocery store
and Fix the agreement mistake
stores
any
coffee shops . I believe you'Correct quantifier usage
apply
re
living in the center
of downtown because your job states that and their transport services are convenient ,each bus comes after 5 minutes and everything is available Change the spelling
centre
at
walking distance.
You can meet new people here Change preposition
within
with
so many ways . You can visit bar shops at night and Change preposition
in
would
go Verb problem
apply
to
tourist buses with a group of people which would help you to be more comfortable with local people. Change preposition
on
Also
, go out with your colleagues on weekends to explore new places ,which also
help
to Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
strong
your Replace the word
strengthen
relation
at Replace the word
relationship
workplace
Correct article usage
the workplace
too
. I'm really excited to come and meet you after Rephrase
apply
long
time . Lots of coffee dates in the future .
Best wishes,
Roopkamal kaur.Change the article
a long
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