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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparison where relevant.
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The table depicts the
informations
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information
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of
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about
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 students who
are attending
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attended
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 four types of middle
high-
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high school
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school
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 from
years
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the years
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 2000 to 2009.
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, it can be seen that Specialist
Schools
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 from time to time
has
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have
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the
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apply
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proportions that always decline and
same
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the same
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like
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as
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 Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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. Grammar
Schools
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 tend to
shows
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 a fluctuation trend. On the other sides, Community
Schools
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 was constantly
increased
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.
To begin
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 with, in 2000, Specialist
Schools
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 at 12 per
cent
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 and slightly down to 11 per
cent
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 in 2005. In 2009, the
school
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 experienced a downward phenomenon at 10 per
cent
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.
Move
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 to other
schools
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, in 2000, Grammar
Schools
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was
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were
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 at
its
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their
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 peak which was 24 per
cent
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.
In five
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 years later, the percentage
was declining
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declined
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 to 19 per
cent
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. In the next four years, the
school
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 at its lowest point at 12 per
cent
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. After that, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 started with high numbers at 52 per
cent
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 in 2000.
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,
slump
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slumped
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 significantly to 38 per
cent
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. In 2009, the
school
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 had a downfall
at
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of
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 20 per
cent
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.
Last
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school
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,
initially
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, Community
Schools
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 only gained 12 per
cent
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 in 2000. But, suddenly up at 32 per
cent
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. Afterwards, the
school
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hitted
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hit
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 the peak at 58 per
cent
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 in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, cent, school with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • secondary school
  • fluctuations
  • popularity
  • shifts in preference
  • policy changes
  • societal trends
  • comparative analysis
  • data brief
  • observable period
  • notable increases/decreases
  • concluding statement
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