The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram reveals the total world
population
percentage
in four nations between 1950 and 2020
along with
the estimations for 2050.
Overall
, the
pecentages
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percentages
percentage
of the
population
from
China
and
Japan
decrease, opposite to that of India.
It is clear that
the
USA
population
percentage
is
deccreasing
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decreasing
and is projected to remain
statble
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stable
in the future. In 1950, the percentages of the total world
population
from India,
China
, the
USA
and
Japan
were 15, nearly 25, around 7 and below 5 per
cent
respectively.
This
all changed in 2020 when there was an increase in its
popultion
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population
percentage
to about 17 per
cent
.
While
the decrease was seen in 3 nations:
China
, the
USA
and
Japan
,
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accounting for 20, 5 and lower than 5 in order. The projected
percentage
made for the total world
population
from India would rise and reach the peak at approximately 18 per
cent
, the
higest
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highest
perentage
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percentage
when compared to those from the other three countries where the drop is expected.
This
accounts for 15 per
cent
in
China
, remaining at 5 per
cent
in the
USA
, and down to nearly 1 per
cent
in
Japan
.
To sum up
, it is obvious that there has been a growing trend of
Indian
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population
, which is
antiocipated
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anticipated
to grow higher,
while
the drops are seen in
Chinese
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the Chinese
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, American and Japanese
population
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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