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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999
#unemployment #rates #japan #march
A glance at the provided line graph depicts the
level
 of
unemployment
 in the US and
Japan
 over a period of 6 years.
Overall
,
although
 the highlighted
level
 decreased sharply in the
Us
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,
this
level
 increased steadily in
japan
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Japan
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 over
a
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the
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 period shown.
In addition
, in 1993, the highest
level
 of
unemployment
 occurred in the
Us
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US
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 a staggering 7%
in contrast
 the mentioned rate was merely 2.5% in
japan
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Japan
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. The thriving of
US
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the US
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 in terms of reducing
unemployment
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the unemployment
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level
 can be seen.
This
level
begun
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with
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at
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a
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apply
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7% in 1993 and fell to just
a
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5% in 1999. In stark contrast,
this
 rate experienced
significant
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increased
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 from 2.5% to over 5%. Both countries had some fluctuations during
this
 period. it is noticeable that prior to 1998 the
level
 of
unemployment
 in the
Us
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US
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 was considerably higher than
Japan
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in Japan
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however
Japan
 overtook in terms of
unemployment
level
 in 1998.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words level, unemployment, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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