The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
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of both genders
whose
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who
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countinued
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continued
continue
their
education
in three different decades whether it part-
time
education
or
ful-
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full-time
time
education
.
Overall
, it clearly shows that both males and females of
part
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part-time
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time
students
got the highest average in all 3 decades compared to
full
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full-time
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time
students
. The
numbers
of
females
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female
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part
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part-time
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time
students
increase respectively through 30 years from almost 750
thousand
in
year
70/71 , 850
thousand
in
year
80/81 and 1100
thousand
in 90/91.
In addition
numbers
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number
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of
females
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female
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full
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full-time
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time
students
also
increased and started at very low
numbers
by less than 100
thousand
then
it jumped sharply more than
the
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apply
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double in
year
80/81
then
it
countiued
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continued
to grow to reach
the
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a
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peak
by
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of
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aproxmaty
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approximately
300
thousand
.
Part
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Part-time
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time
education
for males figure began high
exactly
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at exactly
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1000
thousand
in 70/71
then
dropped by 200
thousand
then
went back up in
early
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90s to
be
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apply
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900
thousand
.
However
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figures in
ful
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full
time
went different it started 100
thousand
in
70s
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the 70s
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then
the
numbers
got higher to be 300
thousand
in
year
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the year
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90/91.
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