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Band 4.5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
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It is true that government and multi-national Organizations can play a
conductive
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 role
to Prevent
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in preventing
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environment
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the environment
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. From
perspectives
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, I completely disagree with
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 view.
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 with,
people
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 are more closely engaged
to
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with
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 the
environment
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 rather than authorities or any type of organizations. Individuals can take some necessary
stepts
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steps
 to protect
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environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
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,
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environment
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the environment
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 could
be conserve
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 from contamination, If
peopler
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people
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 are able to reduce
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waste
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 and
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 it
according to
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 their need.
Secondly
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, tree plantation, which is the key solution for environmental pollution
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it
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would be implemented completely when
people
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 eagerly
persuing
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 themself to plantation.
For example
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, In
Banglades
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Bangladesh
,
Government
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the Government
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decleared
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declared
 July 1st as a day
of
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for
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 tree plantation as
people
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 are willingly encouraged to plant
for
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to
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 Preserve
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environment
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the environment
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.
Besides
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, there are many things to
done
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 by
people
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for
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to
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 improve their circumstances.
Such
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 as Sustainable transportation use can able to reduce air pollution which
grav
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is
the
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a
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 major part of environmental contamination. To clarify that, inhabitants can use
bicycle
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bicycles
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,
rickshaw
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rickshaws
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 and any other kind of
behicle
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vehicle
 rather
that
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than
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the
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transport which can
couse
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cause
Co2
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CO2
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 emission.
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, it will be more conductive, If environmental issues
are affix
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are affixed
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 to the
accademic curiculam
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academic curriculum
.
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result
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result,
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youngstare
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young people
 are able to acknowledge
about
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this
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 matter.
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, teaching about
the
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apply
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environmental issues
what
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that
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 can
arise
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raise
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awarness
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awareness
amonge
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encourages
kidds
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kids
 to plant trees in the schools and their home
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also
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.
furthermore
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,
acquaintance
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with acquaintance
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about
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of
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 the greenhouse effect
people
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 will be more conscious
about
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of
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the
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pollution. In
conclution
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conclusion
, though it is
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crucial
critical
 to take some necessary action by the government and companies
it
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in
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 terms of budget, I firmly believe that
,
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 any kind of decision would not be
success
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 fruitfully
where
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if
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 there is no
cosideration
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consideration
of
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for
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 local
people
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.
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task achievement
Work on grammatical accuracy and clarity. There are several spelling mistakes and awkward phrases that need correction.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. The ideas presented are good but could be connected more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
task achievement
The essay contains relevant and specific examples such as the tree plantation day in Bangladesh.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and provides a clear position on the topic.
task achievement
Effort is made to support the main arguments with examples and reasoning.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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