Fresh water is a limited in some parts of the world. Today, Increasing demand made it a global problem. What are the causes of increasing demand, what measure can government and individuals take to solve problem?

Water
suply
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supply
is
vital
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part of human survival and there is
increasing
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an increasing
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demand
of
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fresh
water
all across the globe.
Human´s
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Humans
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are using more and more fresh
water
and that
have
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made
fresh
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freshwater
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water
demand
a global
problem
. I am going to
adress
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address
some causes for
increased
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the increased
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demand
of
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fresh
water
and give some advice to solve that
problem
.
First,
human´s
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humans
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are using
water
more than just drinking,
for example
, washing laundry uses
lot
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of
water
, same as washing dishes and showering. People even wash
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their cars with fresh
water
.
Also
, farming and
agiculture
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agriculture
are
consumin
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consuming
huge
amount
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amounts
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of fresh
water
.
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sayed
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,
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when people´s
well being
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increases,
water
consumption increases.
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demand
more food and more comfort.
Therefore
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should take action to help solve
global
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the global
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problem
with
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water
demand
.
For example
, they could limit citizen´s
water
suply
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supply
, that alone will help to save lots of fresh
water
.
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Goverment
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Government
should
also
educate
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citizens
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to save
water
, schools and
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stop
adds
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ads
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could be great
place
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to start. That would increase
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awareness
to
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fresh
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the fresh
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water
demand
problem
. People might notice how important fresh
water
is.
However
, despite all
actions
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the actions
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listed above, individual has
biggest
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impact
of
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on
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fresh
water
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freshwater
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demand
problem
. That be
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, everyone should pay attention
of
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to
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their own
water
consuption
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consumption
. People need to think,
what
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about what
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measures they can
do
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take
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to save fresh
water
.
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, can they take quicker showers,
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and can
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they wash laundry less
frequantly
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frequently
.
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Those are great small steps to take for lesser
fresh
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freshwater
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water
consuption
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consumption
.
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,
i
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am taking small actions to save fresh
water
and
i
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think everyone else
need´s
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needs
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to do that
also
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You have highlighted important issues related to water consumption, such as the role of agriculture and individual consumption habits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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