WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make 

Write at least 150 words.
The two pie charts illustrate the important types of
enegy
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energy
in the US in the years 1980 and 1990.
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that oil was the main energy for
this
country,
while
hydroelectric
power
had the smallest
propotion
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proportion
. In 1980, the biggest feature was oil with just above 40% and the less significant percentage
had
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the
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natural gas with approximately a quarter of the pie.
Additionally
,
at
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just over a one-fifth percentage had
the
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black gold, in the year 1980. In
this
year, hydroelectric and nuclear
power
had the same
amout
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amount
of use at exactly 5%. Hydroelectric
power
stayed the same after 10 years,
whereas
nuclear
power
presented an increase to exactly a one-tenth. The biggest
fell
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had
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the oil,
with
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which
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went
downing
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to 33%.
Use
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The use
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of natural gas
also
showed
decline
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a decline
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, but only one
percent
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per cent
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.
Finally
, coal increased to 27%
with
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while
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staying at the same place in
chart
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the chart
a chart
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that was one decade ago
,.
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,
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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