WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Write at least 150 words.
The two pie charts illustrate the important types of
enegy
in the US in the years 1980 and 1990.
Correct your spelling
energy
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that oil was the main energy for this
country, while
hydroelectric power
had the smallest propotion
.
In 1980, the biggest feature was oil with just above 40% and the less significant percentage Correct your spelling
proportion
had
Verb problem
was
the
natural gas with approximately a quarter of the pie. Correct article usage
apply
Additionally
, at
just over a one-fifth percentage had Change preposition
apply
the
black gold, in the year 1980. In Correct article usage
apply
this
year, hydroelectric and nuclear power
had the same amout
of use at exactly 5%.
Hydroelectric Correct your spelling
amount
power
stayed the same after 10 years, whereas
nuclear power
presented an increase to exactly a one-tenth. The biggest fell
Replace the word
fall
had
the oil, Verb problem
was
with
went Correct your spelling
which
downing
to 33%. Replace the word
down
Use
of natural gas Correct article usage
The use
also
showed decline
, but only one Add an article
a decline
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Finally
, coal increased to 27% with
staying at the same place in Change preposition
while
chart
that was one decade agoAdd an article
the chart
a chart
,.
Change the punctuation
,
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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